Opinions differ over whether grades encourage students to learn. Regarding this issue, I agree with the statement. There are numerous reasons that could defend my argument, but two compelling reasons for my argument will be explained in more detail in the following.
To begin with, the most crucial point that should be brought up is broadening perspective on their subjects. To be specific, getting grades creates opportunities for students to know their shortage parts of subjects, which allows them to more study harder about shortage parts. For example, my personal experience illustrates why grades are helpful for students to learn. When I was in college, I got a grade that was very low and it made me discouraged. However, in my school report, there were my shortage parts that I did not think that far before my test, and I could know what parts are were my disadvantage. As a result, my terrible grades made me study more about my shortage parts of the subjects. And Also in last semester, it could bring me a high scores in my last test. Therefore, it is obvious that getting grades is beneficial for students to broaden perspective on their shortage part and study harder than before.
On top of that, it can support my argument that grades make a condition of competition with other students. The opposition asserts that grades are not helpful for students to study. Their idea, however, does not reflect on my position. The grounds of their argument are inappropriate and leave something to be desired. As a matter of fact, a plethora of evidence indicates that their argument has no credibility. (전혀 뒷받침되지 못하는 불필요한 문장입니다.) Beyond my personal experience, a research result substantiates my perspective. Recently, Harvard University conducted a survey of 1000 people who graduated from the college throughout the country. More than 70 percent of people responded a condition made by the grades helped them to study more hard harder. In other words, about 70 percent of people considered sharing their grades with friends and being motivated by comparing their scores with others as a great way to make an atmosphere get condition that they want to compete with others and study more hard harder. Hence, this proves that grades are effective for students to study in competitive condition.
All things considered, it is my belief that my argument has been effectively and precisely delivered with the reasons mentioned above. Firstly, it will broaden perspective of subjects. Secondly, it will make a condition of competition with others.
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