▶ Your Answer :
Some people argue that boys and
girls should have be taught in separated
classrooms and teachers should use different teaching methods to them. However,
this perspective is not true for two the following
two reasons which I am going to elaborated.
First, students can develop their relationship skills. Second, it is not the proper way for student to use different teaching
techniques.
To begin with, studying
teaching boys and girls in a the same class with boys and girls enables them
to understand the different gender interact
with different types of people and develop interpersonal skills. In detail,
dividing students into separated classrooms by
gender provides less opportunity to know each other meet another gender because
they spend a lot of times in their school. However, Since students learn a lot of knowledge and the value of life in school, it
is very important to get to know a wide range
of various people to build social skills
and blend in with the society. For example, a survey was conducted by SJ Corporation's
research department showed that The number of participants participated in
the survey, and their social skills and school life were surveyed. The result
showed that people who had been educated with the other gender in young
age have a better social ability than the others
who hadn’t don’t. (So that?) Therefore,
students have to be educated with other gender of students to adapt in society.
Also, different teaching
skills by according to gender is not an appropriate method to educate
the students. To be specific, in these days, the
boundary of gender role has become less clear been
destructed, so there are little difference of the students’ personality or academic ability between gender. thus, it is an inappropriate for students to teach differently by
gender. Take my mother, for example, she is a teacher who has taught a number
of students for 20 years. Also, she is well-recognized of for a professional teacher by the public. In many
interviews, she repeatedly emphasized that
teachers should not separate students by gender or use different teaching
method to the students by gender. She regrets said in the interview that if she had educated students this way a same way to her students,
many students would not be given side effects, such as have had a wrong stereotype about gender prejudice,
lower interpersonal skills. Such comment sounds highly convincing since she is
a well-known successful teacher. To sum up, students need to study in
appropriate way, not being taught by different study techniques.
In conclusion, I believe I
have accurately demonstrated my point of view on this matter with two concrete
reasons and evidences stated above. Since views and
values of life and values differ among individuals, it seems like this subject will
always remain controversial.(Don’t claim to be
neutral)
채점기준표
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Grammar
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Coherence
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점수
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2
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3
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3
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2
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Fair 18-21
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두 가지 방향의 요지는 좋은 편입니다. 다만 this essay에서 가장 문제가 되는 부분은 inappropriate word choice와 불필요한 문장들이 상당히 많다는 점입니다. 같은 내용의 문장은 계속적으로 반복하여 사용하지 마시고, creative한 contents를 채우면서도 coherently 하도록 내용을 이어가야 합니다.
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