▶ Your Answer :
There
might be some people who believe that it is possible for wealthy and poor
people to be friends. However, I personally disagree with the above idea for
the two subsequent reasons. First, it would be too stressful. Second, they
cannot offer each other great comfort. First of all, people would be too stressed out to hang out with friends who in very different financial status. When
people hang out with their friends, they usually spend time enjoying the common
interest and have fun together. However, people in different status are less
likely to share the same interest or they do things differently according to
with their financial situations. Let me
bring up my personal story as an example. When I was in university, I had a
rich classmate called G-dragon. On weekends, he enjoyed all the things that I
could only dream about such as horse riding overseas or sailing boats. He
invited me to spend one weekend with him and his other rich friends. At first,
I was excited but as time went by, I felt uncomfortable because everything he
owned was just too luxurious for me. I decided not to hang out with him anymore
and we gradually grew apart
could not become
friends.
Second, it is difficult for such friends to offer great comfort to each other.
To explain, we seek our friends when we are feeling blue or stressed, and
a true friend can empathize and give adequate consolation. However, people in
different wealth status usually grew up in different backgrounds and
surroundings so they might not be able to truly understand what each other is
going through or deal with things differently, so won’t be able to sympathize or give advice.
According to a survey done by JYP institute, 80% of the respondents said that
the useful advice they got in the past from friends was from friends who are in
the same or similar financial status. This is due to the fact that people in
similar status usually share similar life style, so they go through relevant experiences that they can relate to. This clearly
shows that giving or getting great comfort will be impossible for wealthy and
poor people.
In
conclusion, it is stressful for poor people to hang out with a wealthy friend
and vice versa, and they cannot offer appropriate comfort to each other. For
these reasons, I personally think that it is impossible for wealthy people and
poor people to become or remain friends.
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Good 20-24
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전반적으로 contents의 idea가 풍부하고 일관성 있게 글을 전개해주신 것 같아요. 무엇보다도, 두 가지
entertainment 와
rich star로 예를 들어주신 부분이 가장
interesting 하네요. Own
opinion에서 “ I decided ‘not’ to ”표현 하시는 부분이 다소
emphatic tone 이기는 하지만, 조금 더 유연하게 풀어나가면 금방 좋아질 수 있을 것 같아요.
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