Some people think that we can't cannot get useful things from the internet. However, in my opinion, we can get many useful information from it. (서론이 부실합니다. 이어서 설명하고자 하는 point들을 짧게 요악해주세요.) To begin with, online dictionaries dictionary of the internet gives us many benefits. We can get various sorts of knowledge from the dictionary. And we can do some homework, studying, and researches, too. For instance, Jack Andraka, the teenager boy invented an innovational diagnostic kit for pancreatic cancer. And He (문장 첫머리의 Hha had help from information only from the Internet got from only internet. Moreover, I can get lots a lot of useful information from the Internet when I have my homework to do. I can get variety of things from variety of people. So I can use them very usefully. (이 문장의 topic sentence가 무엇인지?) On top of that, we can know about many new things from the Internet. We can get all of the things about many areas such as science, politics, music, art, new technology technologies, and so on. In fact, most of people can follow the trend because of information that they get by searching on the Internet. (이것이 왜 좋은지가 설명이 되어야 글쓴이 주장을 제대로 뒷받침합니다.) Also, we can communicate easily with each other and be together because we can talk about somethings which we get from the Internet. To sum up, we can get many benefits from the Internet and know about many things from it. In this regard, I believe that the Internet is a good way to get useful information. Writing 0-30 scale Fair(20-24) TOEFL 독립형 글쓰기의 채점기준은 글의 길이가 300단어 이상일 것을 요구합니다. (225단어) TOEFL 글쓰기는 academic writing skill을 평가하는 시험입니다. 따라서 축약형 등 비격식체와 구어체를 피하고 정확한 영어를 사용해야 합니다. 또, 본문의 각 문단은 각각 하나의 topic sentence를 핵으로 해서, 그것을 논리적으로 지지하고 발전시켜야 합니다. 균형 잡힌 글쓰기를 위해서는 서론과 결론을 간단하게나마 제대로 맺어주는 것이 좋습니다. 주장을 짧게 요약하고 각 point를 한 줄 정도로만 정리해도 충분합니다. 관사(a/an, the)를 어떤 경우에 어떤 것을 붙이고 어떤 경우에 붙이지 않는지를 확인해보세요. |