▶ Your Answer :
In
this set of materials, both the reading passage and the lecture deal with
several assumptions of the ashen light of Venus. The lecturer argues that the
suppositions have not been proven and the ashen light of Venus considers as
a mistery is considered as a mystery. This counters the writer‘s
assertion that there are many theories that could be possible to support about
the ashen light. First of all, according to the lecturer, chemical process
can not be a factor that cause the ashen light. This is because the ashen light is faint and difficult to be detected.
Observing the light is only possible by using special and powerful telescopes.
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문장 병합해주세요.This contradicts the writer’s
argument that the recombination of carbon dioxide in atmosphere cause the ashen
light. Next, the lecturer goes on to say that the ashen light
does not seem to be seen by sunlight. This is due to the fact that the ashen light
occurs very rarely. If the sunlight is a factor that generates the ashen light,
the ashen light could have seen more frequently. The challenges the writer’s
claim that the sunlight make the glow reflective. Finally, the lecturer maintains that auroraes can not be
the reason to bring about the ashen light. Since the Venus does not have
magnetic field, it is not impossible to make the plasma. <- 설명 더 해주세요. Magnetic field/aurorae 의 관계에 대한 문장 써주세요. This
refutes the writer’s viewpoint that the glow might be aurorae. Writing 0-30 Score
Scale Good (24 - 30)
Overall Comment: 전체적으로 points 잘 잡아주셨고, flow 좋아요. Body 1 이 Body 3 에 비해서 기네요. 분량 동일 하게 쓰도록 해주세요. Introduction 이 다소
길어서 한문장 정도 빼면 좋을거 같네요! 수고하셨습니다~ |