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The
reading passage contends that privatizing in infrastructure industries have
positive effects on governments’ profits and efficiency of infrastructure
industries. However, the lecturer insists that there are many disadvantages of
privatizing in these industries and governments control infrastructure
industries better than private companies. <- 내용 요약 해주세요. With regard to this, the speaker brings up
several points that contradict former argument. First of all, the lecturer states that
governments cannot net billion dollars by selling industries although
governments need influx of cash. <- Why? <-> 연결 안됩니다. Moreover, governments run industries
for all citizens. This counters the reading passage’s assertion that
governments have raised astonishing profits through selling diverse industries. Second, the speaker indicates that
people will do not have the choice since monopoly if governments sell
infrastructure industries to private companies. Actually it is not fair.
Furthermore, for instance, an new owner of the infrastructure industry lays off
twenty percent of the workforce. These fired employees could not support their
family. It means that governments’ sources of incomes must have decreased. This
casts doubt on the reading passage’s claim that privatizing improves
productivity of infrastructure. Last, the speaker admits that companies like the Apple,
the Amazon and the Microsoft have the tendency to introduce faster than governments. However, according to the lecture, it
is not a bad thing that governments institute new technology slowly. This is
because new technology causes plethora of problems. This refutes the reading
passage’s explanation that private companies are
inclined to institute new
technology rather than government-owned companies are. Writing 0-30 Score
Scale Limited (0-16) Overall Comment: 에세이 전체적으로 organization 이 없어요. 내용이 reading-listening 왔다갔다 거리고, 문장간 연결도 안되어
있어요. Listening point 문장 별로 요약해서 나열하신거 같은데, flow 가 좋지 않습니다. 모범 답안을 보시고 에세이 쓰는 방식에
대해 공부 꼭 해주세요.
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