▶ Your Answer :
In the reading, there is ample support for the author’s claim that The Everglades has some
environmental problems. However, the professor in the lecture gives several
reasons as a rebuttal against the author’s point.
To begin with, the speaker argues that The Everglades is
still hopeful. its water pollution has been declined
since The Government pronounced new regulation that the use of fertilizer which is not contained harmful chemicals,<- 어색합니다. leading
agricultural facilities to change fertilizer. As a result, water condition has
been restored. This casts doubt on the
author’s claim that water pollution from a nearby agricultural
site. <- incomplete sentence 입니다.
On top of that, the lecturer contends that The Everglades
has good news that is The Everglades’ -> its soil is being remedied. This is because people who
live in adjacent to The Everglades promote restoring the soil project.
It will guarantee of returning the soil to original condition. This counters
the author’s point that The
Everglades’ soil has been dried and eroded because of
The US government.
Finally, the professor maintains that many animals in The
Everglades are much less likely to extinct. This is because The US authorities
purchased a great deal of area to convert wetland. Wetland 와 animal
의 관계 설명 해주세요. Many people predict that The Everglades will be recovered
the original state Even though it will take a long time. As a result, the
animals will increase in the number. This refutes the author’s suggestion that The Everglades’ animals will be extinct because of the human development.
Writing 0-30 Score
Scale
Fair (17-23)
Overall Comment: 문법 실수가 많아서 전달력이 안좋아요. 문법 공부 꼭! 해주세요. 전체적으로 listening point 들은 잘 잡아 주셨어요. Body 3 에서는 Point 다시 잡아주세요. 위에 코멘트 한 부분 꼭 다시 읽어주세요~ |