▶ Your Answer : The writer of the article enumerates three theories explaining
that there is no way to use the tamarisk beetle as a biological control for
diminishing the population of the tamarisk tree since it has several defects.
In relation to this, the lecturer contends that these theories are dwarfed
by corresponding counterarguments. First, the reading passage indicates
that it is not possible to manage the population of the tamarisk beetle
because it is very aggressive when it comes to pervasiveness. (<-정확히 무슨 의미인지 잘 이해하지 못했는데, pervasiveness가 population을 의미하는 건가요? 개체수가 많아지면 aggressive해져서, 개체수를 조절하기 힘들다는 것인가요?) This might be true to some extent, but the professor expresses
skepticism on this argument arguing that not only the tamarisk beetle feeds on the tamarisk tree, but
also has various predators such as birds and wasps. Therefore, the assertion on
this idea does not hold any water. Second, it is also maintained in the
reading material that devastation period of the tamarisk tree will prolong
since the tamarisk beetles harm only small portion of the tree. However,
this point of view is somewhat myopic. Based on what the speaker says the
trees infested with the beetles will have slow rate of photosynthesis.
Subsequently, the use of water will lessen by that effect. As a result, it is
not persuasive to say that the second evidence in support of X(?) is substantiated. Lastly, the document purports that the
increased amount of the dead branches, which are much more flammable than live
wood, will lead to an increased risk of wildfires. However, this idea is adversely
commented upon by corresponding counterarguments. Although the dead wood
might make the environment more vulnerable to wildfires, they are removed
annually (by…?). Furthermore, government agencies are used to managing
wildfires and intentional control burn action can be exercised to prevent
wildfires before they spread out to farther areas. Thus, according to what the
speechmaker points out, it is a bit of exaggeration to say that because of
increased risk of wildfires, it is not proper to take advantage of the tamarisk
beetles. To sum up, the speaker draws suspicion
on this claim that it is inappropriate to manipulate the tamarisk beetle to
reduce the overall number of the tamarisk tree which will use up the large
amount of water in the American Southwest, presenting three counterarguments Writing
0–30 score scale Good(24-28)
문법적인 실수나 빠진 포인트 없이 잘 쓰셨는데, 양이 상당히 길어 불필요한 부분은 삭제하고 좀 더
요약해주는 편이 좋겠습니다. (각 문단에서 이 생각은 뒤의 의견에 따라 반박된다-는 문장이 있는데 굳이 길게 표현하지 않고 그러나 강연자는~이라고
바로 시작해도 됩니다. 왜냐하면 각 포인트문단의 맨 끝에도 요약을 한 번 해주기때문에) 또한 conclusion 부분(main
topic에 관한 내용)은 intro에서 밝혀줘도
좋겠습니다. 수고 많으셨습니다^^ |