■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic : The ability to cooperate well with others is more important today than in the past. | |
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Most of all, individuals do not need to cooperate each other, because advanced technology can solve demanding problems. By using developed technology, people can rapidly finish their work in which many people had to struggle in the past. For example, farming needed a lot of people to complete all process from seeding to harvesting in the past; whenever doing arduous works, they had to gather neighbors and collaborate together. However, after advent of agricultural machine, farmers did not need to depend on cooperation. Since the machines provide high efficiency and help farmers save time for cultivation, in today, farmers can management large area they have without others' help. Therefore, importance of cooperation has more diminished than the past.
Additionally, today's society do not consider cooperation as productivity because of changing to high-tech industry. There is a saying that ' one percent of whole people in the world can feed ninety-nine percent of those.' This means that a smart person who generates valuable ideas is more important than many people producing just simple products. In the past, manufacturing industry needed many people to yield mass products. While today's society wants high technology and creative knowledge from few people. Actually, since many companies prefer to recruit intelligent person who can cover others' activity, students improve their abilities focused on independent skills, such as language or computer programming knowledge. They mostly do not weight cooperation ability. Thus, it is not necessary to cooperate well in the present.
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