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Some
people said that leadership comes naturally. However, I disagree with the
statement. This is because it is possible that leadership can be nurtured by
public education or personal experience. First
of all, leadership is able to be developed by public education. In these days, a
lot of curriculums of educational institutions enable students and ordinary
person to be taught teach about necessary characteristics for leader. For example, at history
classes in many middle and high schools, teachers and instructors have
inculcated the students with essential traits of leader such as honesty, a sense
of justice, insightness, and differentiating personal thing from official
benefits. Through theses classes, we can learn how to overcome severe hardships
and adversities, and importance of the traits mentioned above. Therefore, by
naturally following and mimicking the features of leader, many ordinary people
who were was taught by public education can be equipped with the key traits for
becoming a leader. Thus, public education allows people to naturally have crucial
features of leader, which promote ordinary people to become a leader with
leadership in society.
In
addition, leadership is able to be grown by personal experience. Personal
experience by surrounding circumstances has a significant impact on person's
personality. To be more specific, if you have highly admirable and respectable parents,
friends, or relatives, you are likely to naturally follow their act and
hbehavior. Through the process, you can naturally be equipped with important
personality such as generosity, patience, or courage, which are fundamental and
necessary personality of leader with leadership.
In
brief, I disagree with the statement. This is because leadership can be grown
by public education and private experience by surrounding circumstances.
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첫번째 본문 -수동태는 be p.p. 형태입니다. -students and ordinary person이 가르치는 것이 아니라 배우는 것이므로 teach-->be taught -과거 분사 have inculcated -철자 오류 these -people 복수이므로 was-->were
두번째 본문 -수동태 be p.p -철자 오류 behavior -철자 오류 equipped
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