■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic :
Attractive Appearance and fashion is more important than one’s ability to succeed. Ag/Dis |
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▶ Your Answer :
Some people might say that it is important to get attractive appearance and fashion when it comes to personal success in the world. However, in my opinion, one’s ability is definitely more important than any other things. This is because when large companies hire people, they do not really care about the appearance, looking and fashion of candidates.
To begin with, one of the standard of success between the 20’s who graduated their university is working in the huge company since getting into the huge companies such as Google, Facebook, etc. is like a camel passing through the eye of a needle nowadays especially in South Korea. So following this suggestion, most of large companies only hire people with one’s ability such as their portfolio or skills. To explain, if you do not have a lot of money, you cannot spend your money for your appearance or shopping. But one’s ability or skill is dependent on the personal effort regardless of money. Also, one’s ability can be clouded by other’s abilities if you are obsessed with appearance. I will give you an example of my personal experience to elucidate my point. For example in Korea, job seekers should attach their formal pictures when they apply to the companies and I actually do not have a good appearance objectively. But I have accumulated my skills and make the portfolio in my field, computer science through my effort. As a result, a lot of companies conceded my tasks and I could be hired by a good company. Also whenever I am at the office, I always feel like the people who has good ability is regarded as ‘a person of intelligence’ rather than the people who care about their looking.
To sum up, most of people who can lead you to suceess are simply concentrate on your expertise. In this regard, I believe the most important factor is not about one’s appearance but one’s ability. |
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