▶ Your Answer :
Some people think that assistance from
government is a better way to solve problems. However, in my opinion, I think
that dealing with problems on one’s own is more reasonable. This is because
people can know their situation well and find out suitable methods for them.
Also government assistance takes a lot of time.
First, people can resolve their problems on
their own. They know about their problem the most. As such, they can think
about various methods through their experiences and situations and by comparing
them, and they will find the best way to solve the problem. For example, there was
a survey conducted by Seoul National University to determine that when people
had a trouble, how they have solved their problem. Subjects were asked to
remind their problems and experiences that they dealt with them. Most of people
responded they could resolve problems on their own and it was more easier than
other methods since they understood themselves very well and they knew what was
the best for them. This survey showed that people could deal with problems the
way what they wanted.
Second, receiving government assistance
takes lots of time. If I find the way to deal with my problem, it is not going
to much take time. However, government assistance requires many steps and also each
step takes time to be approved. Time is gold and you can solve your problem
while you are waiting for response from government. For example, when I lived
in a studio apartment, I always had parking problem with one of my neighbors.
Since I did not didn't know a phone number of the owner of that car, I requested help to
the city hall. In order to get help and response, I needed to wait two weeks.
After I decided to solve this on my own, I went around my entire apartment and
found the owner. I talked to him about the parking matter and it was solved
easily than I thought.
To sum up, people can look for what is the best
choice for the problem on their own. Moreover, people have to wait long time to
receive assistance from government. In this regard, I think that solving the
problem on one’s own is better so it is unnecessary to ask government aid.
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