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Good examples and good syntactic variety. Clean up the grammar a little. How long did this take to write?
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│ You need travel from your home to a place 40 miles away. Compare the different kinds of transportation you could use. Tell which method of travel you would choose. Give specific reasons for your choice.
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│ When I travel from my home to a place 40 miles away, there are usually three types of transportation I can use: subway, bus, and a passenger car. A place 40 miles away is not so far from my home. It will not take long to get there by one of three methods. However, it would be another issue if I used them during busy hours. (delete)
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Subway is the most fast transportation among them and highly punctual. Most people prefer it in case of their commuting and lack of time. Besides, its fare is relatively low when compared with the other transportation. More importantly, it is much safer than any other transportation to get there.
│ Bus is another public transportation I can use. After our city started the bus-use only lane, people who get on the buses have been increasing as travelling time is getting short. Compared with subway, bus has, in my thought, an important advantage. Even though subway is more convenient in various ways, it sometimes need long walk to find another line whenever people transfer. In particular, for elders, it is difficult to change lines. I witnessed frequently that they were so afraid that they chose to take a bus. Bus need not take a walk long when one has to transfer. One can take another bus on the same place where one get off.
│ A passenger car is used by most people because it is comfortable. As my country is developing, most people have their own private cars. For me, I have one and used to enjoy driving. If there is no heavy traffic on the road, I will drive my car by myself to get there. However, gas price has been stiffly increased since the economic crisis in Korea. Someone like me who preferred using a private car began to use the public transportation. It is the only way to save money.
│ For the reasons, I will decide to travel by bus. Bus is more convenient than subway, and is cheaper than a passenger car. What is make matters better, if most passenger cars stuck with traffic jam on the road, the bus I took would break through the situation on the bus-use only lane.
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