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Opinions may
vary whether people should take some time to make a decision or not. (There can be many thoughts about the amount of time to
decide something.) Some people can think that hasty decisions are never the
right ones while others can take the opposite
view. Among these opinions, I agree with the former statement and think that it
is more persuasive.
The first reason for my
opinion is that if we are hast in making decision, there can be a lot of
elements we don’t take into account. If it’s
a small decision such as what to wear to work, it won’t be a problem. (It
will be okay, if it was just a private problems like which clothes is better to
me.) However, if the decision is something very important,
nobody wants to risk making a wrongful one. It
is because the decision can bring negative consequences. (was about
which ones is better as a material to produce a commodities to sell to
customers, the wrong decision would make a tremendous consequence.) Then, it will bring a serious situation where we have to
make a more complex decision. People should try to avoid that situation. (We
have to avoid it.)
The second equally important
reason is that it is not the fast way to do something by deciding something
hasty. Rather, it can make us spend more time and money than otherwise. What it means (I
mean) is that, it is not easy to change a decision
once it is made. (restore the bad situation into the right way.) For
example, if a company made a quick decision to
produce goods and the products turned out to be defective, the company would be
in a big trouble. (we made the products according to the wrong hasty
decision, we have to account for it and return to the first stage to make a
decision.) It really was a waste of time then.
Therefore, I
strongly believe that it is better to make a decision more carefully than
making it quickly. It can eventually save time and energy and possibly money in
the end. (There would be many statements and
reasons that have another thinking and logic about this topic. But still, I
think it is better to make a decision more carefully at once by elaborate and
prudent thinking and discussion.)
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