▶ Your Answer : The reading and the lecture both talk talks about a law for new species. The reading passage states that there are three problems for implementing the law. However, the professor disagrees by arguing that there are flaws about the reading's proposals.
Firstly, the writer says that people could not live with their pets because of the law. On the contrast, the speaker refutes the reading passage by saying that there is no effect on to their pets. He continues explaining that the law would be affecting animals for sale and import.
Second, the reading states that it costs a lot for studying damages made by foreign animals. On the contrary, the lecturer rebuts this by asserting that money for conducting research is a worth paying for. He adds by giving gives an example of a huge snake destroying native species. 이 사례가 어떤 주장을 뒷받침하는지도 간단히 말해주세요.
Lastly, the reading passage contends that it is not reasonable at all to apply the law to whole country. 어떤 점에서 not reasonable하다고 주장했는지 detail이 더 필요할 것 같아요. However, the professor disagrees by claiming that foreign species can damage whole country. His claims supported by the idea that a virus from Brazilian rabbit spread through whole country and resulted in negative effect on the to whole country's environment. 나라 전체에 영향을 미칠 수 있다는 반박이 어떤 맥락에서 나왔는지가 불분명합니다. 예를 들어 [법을 일부 외래종의 영향이 있는 지역이 아니라 나라 전체에 적용하는 것이 너무 과하다-아니다, foreign species가 나라 전체에 영향을 미친 Brazilian rabbit의 케이스를 생각하면 과하지 않다]하는 식으로 명확히 반박구도가 드러나는 요약이 필요해요.
Comment : 기본적으로 요약문의 구성이 잘 되어 있지만, 각 지문에서 '어떤 근거로' 그런 주장을 제시했는지 detail이 더 필요해 보입니다. reading이 제기한 주장을 lecturer가 반박하는 이유가 더 명확히 드러나도록 내용을 보완해주시면 좋을 것 같아요. 문법표현에서 전치사 사용과 관련된 오류 중점적으로 검토해주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 3/5 A response at this level contains some important information from the lecture and conveys some relevant connection to the reading, but it is marked by one or more of the following : - Although the overall response is definitely oriented to the task, it conveys only vague, global, unclear, or somewhat imprecise connection of the points made in the lecture to points made in the reading. - The response may omit one major key point made in the lecture. - Some key points made in the lecture or the reading, or connections between the two, may be incomplete, inaccurate, or imprecise. - Errors of usage and/or grammar may be more frequent or may result in noticeably vague expressions or obscured meanings in conveying ideas and connections.
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