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Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age and should spend most of their time on school studies. Others believe that young children should spend most of their time playing. Compare these two views. Which view do you agree with? Why?
When a number of parents bring up their children, they often have a different preference about how to educate their children. Generally some people argue that children have to start a early education, while others require children to play all the time. The purpose of this report is to compare how each view different and decide better type to children.
The early education is effective to find the hidden talent of children. “Han-na Chang” who is a famous cellist in the world, for instance, can discovery her ability to play cello by the systematic early education. If she did not get a early education, she may be a common woman. Therefore the regular early education can develop children's capability and guide them to what they want to do. In addition a brain at the time of children actively operate and develop intellectual faculties. Consequently children at a very early age can learn more knowledge and information than others.
The children who consume most of their time can learn more experience than others. It is really important for children to live together with a large number of people. Therefore they easily adapt themselves to their surroundings. Besides the children is able to be mature in mental while they face lots of circumstances. So, it is helpful for children to recognize what is right or what is wrong. Spending most of their early age in playing is positive, but nevertheless the children suffer from a great burden.
In conclusion, two views that I compared with above the passage have each advantage, however I think that the secondary approach is better to children. The first reason is to find and increase their concealed capability. The next is to improve their intellectual capacity. The last is to reduce their studying which they have to do.