▶ Your Answer :
In the reading passage, there is ample support for the author's claim that Laocoon is a forgery made by Mmichelangelo. However, the professor in the lecture gives several reasons as a rebuettal to the author's claim. ^ First, the professor contends that Giuliano is Michelangelo's friend, and assisteds Michelangelo during for a long time. Therefore, Michelangelo musth not have fooled him. This casts doubt on the reading passage's assertion that Michelangelo forged the Laocoon to fool his rival, Giuliano. ^ Next, the preofessor argues that the Laocoon was founded before The last Judgement was made. In addition, Mmichelangelo was influenced from Laocoon and made his painting, The last Judgement. This refutes the reading passage's suggestion that the fact Laocoon has resemblance with The last Judgement proves that Laocoon is fake. ^ Finally, the professor says that artists were commonly influenced from form classical works during the Renaissance. However, forgery was a serious crime in that time and who forged forgeried the art could be dead. This counters the reading passage's idea that the Laocoon is might be a forgery because a forgery was a commoly accepted for artists in that time.
Fair/Good (20-25)
대소문자 실수와 스펠링 실수가 많습니다. 쓰실 때 유의하시고 proofreading을 통해서도 잡아주는 연습해주세요. 또한, 본문마다 reading passage에 대한 반박에 대한 부가 설명을 더 자세히 해주세요. 교수의 반박과 reading을 좀더 연결시켜 주세요. 예를 들어, Laocoon이 The Last Judgement보다 더 일찍 만들어졌으니, Laocoon이 forgery일 수 없다라고 더 명확히 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 다른 본문들도 비슷한 맥락으로 의미를 함축하거나 암시하지 말고 더 명확하게 써주세요. |