It is believed that preparing food these days is easier than before and it brought that fact improved the quality of life. I strongly support of this idea. As you can easily look at elements and calories of your meal and buy some stuffs from anywhere including take-out shops and convenience stores when you are too busy to prepare something to eat (한 절이 너무 깁니다), it helps your life you become more healthier.
Firstly, more and more people more and more have interest in eating balanced meal in their daily lives. It brought positive results, which that food providers make their products considering consumers' health. So, they write down ingredients and calories on meals then the product so that we can check it before choosing what to eat. (설명이 너무 부족합니다. 그래서 좋은 점이 무엇인지? 과거와 비교해서 삶의 질이 개선된 게 무엇인지?)
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Secondly, eating regularly is quiet important to keep our health. As the busier people are, the more people skip their meals,so it is harder to keep healthy life style. However, there are many restaurants and convenience stores selling foods for a single person and busy people and it encourage people not to skip their meals. In other words, in terms of avoiding skipping their meals, it is said that people can achieve better quality of their lives. (주어진 주제는 “음식 준비하기가 과거보다 쉽다는 사실이 삶의 질을 개선시켰다”입니다. 이 point는 음식을 준비하는 것과는 별 관련이 없습니다.)
To summarize, through planning what to eat checking ingredients and calories, and avoiding skipping their meals no matter how busy they are, we can enjoy a better lives than ever before. So, I believe that the fact preparing foods is easier than before brought bright outcome.
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