▶ Your Answer :
Without doubt, Economics a doubt economics play a significant role in people’s
daily lives. Some people think that learning basic economics is necessary to
all high school students, while others do not think differently. Both sides may have their own
reasons to support their own views. If I were asked to choose one, I would say
that studying basic economics in high school is better due to the following
reasons. for the following reasons.
To begin with, knowing basic economics allows people to
improve their daily lives. In modern society, our lives are closely related to
economics from buying simple stuff to selling house. Therefore, learning basic
economics are is required to to live easier and more convenient, and a person who
lack lacks knowledge about economics could be simply ignored. For example, my sister,
Lisa, was taught basic economics when she was high school student. The first
month, after she lived alone, she cannot eat dinner for five days because she
spent her whole salary. She also, lived very small house that bugs sometimes
are appeared. She wanted to escape her situation. Therefore, she remembered
that her basic economics teacher said house account book could help her manage her
salary. She made simple plan to maintain her life. It is really helpful. After
she made useful and right account book by using her smartphone app, she could
live more abundant. Even, she could save regular money. Finally, she could move
bigger house and luxury items which she wanted to buy.
All things considered, I strongly believe that the advantage
of learning basic economics far outweigh its disadvantages for the reasons I
have mentioned above. All in all, the importance of learning economics in high
school cannot be overestimated in the pursuit of happiness in life. Fair: 17~23 점수: 20 일단 너무나 많은 정보를 하나의 단락에 다 넣으려고 합니다. 이렇게 에세이를 서술하는 것 보다는 좀 더 두 개 이상의 이유를 서술하시는 것이 좋을 거 같습니다. 특히 인트로에서 여러가지이유를 서술한다라고 되어 있기 때문에 하나의 이유보다는 두 개 이상의 이유를 서술하는 것이 더 좋을 거 같습니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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