■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words.
■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer
▶ Topic :
When people consider a major purchase, which of the following has the greatest impact on their
choices?
-recommendation from friends
-information from magazines
-reviews from online communities
▶ Your Answer :
There are some people who take it for granted that it is desirable to look up some magazines or
recommendation from friends. However, contrary to what they believe, I strongly have faith in reviews
from online communities; there exist roughly two subsequent reasons to back up my perspective. First,
information from magazines are mostly exaggerated. Second, reviews of my friends are not suitable for
me due to different tendencies.
First of all, information from magazines
enticement in their advertisement to engage people to buy their products, which means that the products
they relased release might not be truthful enough. They might hide some elements that might they deem to be
weakness as much as they can, whereas they exaggerate the factors regarding regarded as to be useful. For
example, in a cell phone company, the workers in the company design an advertisement that show the
strenght strength of their cell phone like using light metals, but they don't mention its delicate screen that might
let the customers get hurt.
To make matters worse, suggestions from friends is also not a wise idea. To be specific, friends are not
professional expertists experts about the certain products that I want to use, along with the preference peference or
expectation toward a particlular good among friends is different, which implies that what my friends like
might be not my favor to utilize. Let me bring my personal experiance as an example, I wanted to buy a
computer, so I asked my friends to get abvise advise about which one is better. I bought one according to the model
that my friend told me, which is Samesung galaxy 4, and it was the good that are considered as one of
the most regretful ones. (문장이 해석이 안되네요)
In conclusion, collecting information from the magazines and friends are not a favorable way to buy
some goods by virtue of its less reliance about the goods and different favor toward the specific
goods. (마찬가지로 문장이 해석이 안되네요) In this regard, I have a strong conviction that It is better to buy a product according to the review from the internet, rather than other options.
예상점수: 11-14
총평: 글 중간에 해석이 안되는 문장들이 너무 많습니다. 시험을 보실 때는 꼭 글을 다시 한번 점검하시면서 이러한 문장들을 찾아내셔서 구체적이고 명확하게 표현하는 연습을 하셔야 할 것 같아요. 문법적으로 시제와 idiom 문제가 많습니다. 내용적인 부분은 잘 제시해주신 것 같습니다. 예시도 적절하고 설득력도 있습니다. 수고 많으셨습니다.