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198자 이기 때문에 독립형 기준에 분량 미달이므로 매우 낮은 점수를 받는 글입니다.
Some people might think that people should be charged when they take public transportation. However, in my opinion, people should not pay public transportation fees because it will reduce the traffic and give economic benefits to families. To begin with, offering free transportation fees reduces the road traffic. This is because people will ride the bus or the subway that is given for free instead of driving, which is much more expensive. Studies have shown that the cities which have implemented free transit has less traffic than before. This shows that free public transportation has been successful.
On top of that, providing free transit gives economic benefits to families. This is because people can offset other expense by using transportation free of charge. For example, in my family's monthly expenditure, the policy helps get economic benefits to families. I have mother, father and two sisters. Two sisters and I always take the bus to go school and my parents ride the subway for work. In my family, public transportation in this istuation takes big part in expense. +어떻게 공짜 대중교통을 통해 현재 경제적 이득이 돌아갈 수 있는지 작성해주세요. To sum up, free public transit would produce positive results, such as reduced traffic and economic benefits. In this regard, I believe people should not pay public transportation fees for the reasons I mentioned above.
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- 분량 미달입니다. - 구체적인 example이라고 보기엔 family의 경우 구체적으로 어떤 경제적 이득을 얻을 수 있는 지 등을 서술해주세요. - 오타 및 쉼표 사용 주의해주세요. |