Some people think that books have influenced society more than television has. However, in my opinion, television has impacted society more than books. This is because that people do not read a lot of books today and the television has the ability of impact in today society. (주장에 대한 근거가 아니라 주장 그 자체를 반복한 것에 불과합니다.)
To begin with, books have not affected the society. (너무 나간 주장이 아닐까요? 이렇게까지 안 가도 ‘책과 비교해서 텔레비전이 더 많은 영향을 끼쳤다’는 것만 설명하면 충분합니다.) This is because that people almost do not read books these day. For example, there was a poll conducted by Tom Rath, the director of the Gallup Organization with 200 collage college students as respondents. The purpose of the survey was to understand the consensus view about the volumes of collage students' reading how much college students read for a year. The overwhelming 76% responded that they did not read books, and not even comic books. The majority of respondents replied that they spend spent a lot of time on doing with a smart phone and searching on the Internet when they had free time. This showed that people had the negative impact of reading books. (그래서 텔레비전은???? 글쓴이가 설명해야 하는 것은 텔레비전이 책보다 영향력이 크다는 것입니다. 포인트는 텔레비전에 있습니다.)
On top of that, the television is powerful in society than books. (서론에서 말했듯 주장에 대한 근거가 아니라 주장 그 자체를 반복한 것에 불과합니다.) The reason are that an array of people have televisions and they just turn on TV , so, they can gain trendy news easily. People can just easily turn it on with a single button to get the trending news everyday. For instance, my cousin has not had does not have a television for a long time and he only has reads newspapers. When I read the newest political issues and social news, he always listens to these news later than me. Whenever I talk with him about the current issues, I feel like the conversation is going nowhere, because he without a television was too late for news. Therefore, when I told him each other about the latest news, I felt stuffy for him. (나는 답답함을 느꼈다 랑 대화가 통하지 않다.. 어떻게 써야 하는 잘 모르겠어요..ㅜㅜ) (그래서 텔레비전의 영향력은???)
To sum up, televisions have influenced the society more than books (주제가 뭐였는지 잊지 마세요) because people do not read books these day and the television has the powerful impact in society than books. In this regard, I disagree with the statement that books have influenced society more than television has.
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