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The
reading passage contends that incentives that local governments provide have many positive outcomes for locals. On the other
hand, the lecturer brings up several key issues that contradict this argument.
First,
the lecturer maintains that the tax revenue will not be increased. To be specific, a study revealed that because of tax
rebates, overall tax revenue decreases.
Therefore, local governments will gain less tax, and it will not be good enough
to help investing in projects. This rebuffs the
reading passage's claim that incentives will expand the tax revenue.
Next,
the speaker argues that using incentives will not create many new jobs for
local people. When businesses come to a new
area, existing companies suffer from competition with new businesses. It causes
the downsize or collapse of existing companies
so that there might be job losses to local people. In addition, outside
businesses which want to move to new areas
usually employ current employees. This refutes the reading passage's claim that
if local governments give incentives to attract businesses, it
will offer lots of new jobs. (철자 오류 조심해 주세요)
Finally, the lecturer asserts
that it is not beneficial to the local environment. (what
is ‘it’?) It should be effective only
when (only위치에 따라 뜻이 달라져요.) only replacing existing conventional factories. If new
businesses come to a new area, there must be
more pollutants than before, so the local governments' incentives are not
effective at all. This contradicts the reading passage's point that offering
green incentives to companies is advantageous to the local environment.
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Comment: |
두 글의 입장을 잘 써주시고 비교를
해주셨지만, 문법 및 철자 오류가 너무 많아서 감점을 많이 드렸어요. 통합형은 독립형에 비해 짧아서 작은 문법 오류도 매우 눈에 띄니
조심을 하셔야 합니다. a/the 사용법을 더 숙지하셔야 할 것 같습니다. |
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