▶ Your Answer : Some people said that books are more enjoyable than movies. However, in my opinion, watching movies in theater is a better way to enjoy than books. This is because films have great sounds, visual images which can effect on audience positively and are not too long. To begin with, movie works have influence on human's sensory organ like acoustic and visual sensor. This lead people to concentrate on the masterpiece so they can enjoy that time fully. For example, a study was conducted by Film Academy Institution in 2009 to determine whether emotional things could affect people's pleasure. The researchers monitored the hormone of 200 people watching movie over 3 year period. After figuring out the data, the researchers found something intriguing. When the additional elements were combined, their stress levels declined and they felt happy. On the top of that, reading materials take much more time to finish than films do. Although what we read is so famous that it is called "masterpiece", if the time to finish reading the book were required too much, we would feel so boring bored even almost falling in sleep. For instance, when I was in high school, I had chance to read "Blindness". I was very satisfied with its cover, plot and development of story. It was very exciting first few time. But as time went by, I could not concentrate on reading because it had a lot of contents so there were an array of series which made me boring. Finally I almost fell in asleep. So I decided to watch movie which had same the story. While I was watching, I was engrossed the feature during for about 2 hours. I thought it is good length to appreciate as we compared this to time to conclude reading materials. To sum up, movies have a variety of positive effects on human's pleasure by providing amusing sounds and showing screen and, of course, it is not too tedious to be bored because of its proper long time.In this regard, I strongly believe that when we go to theater, we can much more enjoy that time than when we are reading.
예상점수: 17-21 총평: 구성과 예시 모두 잘 해주셨고 글도 논지에 맞게 잘 서술해 주셨습니다. 다만 두번째 이유가 약간 논리적으로 부족하다는 생각이 드네요. 물론 책을 읽을 때 더 많은 시간이 드는 것은 맞지만 항상 졸리거나 힘이 든건 아닐수도 있으니까요. 조금 더 설명을 해주셨으면 좋았을 것 같다는 생각이 듭니다. 나머지는 문법적인 시제 오류나 반복된 단어 사용등의 문제가 있었습니다. 수고 많으셨습니다.
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