▶ Your Answer : Some people think that it is not required for high school students to learn about economics. However, in my opinion , learning economics is disire desirable for high school students and there are two reasons why. First, It can help students to get a job in this society. Second, They can try enormous field with economic knowledge To begin with, Students are given aid from economics knowledge. To be specific, To survive in this world of endless competition , people ought to get knowledge even in economics. In the case of having less knowledge, everyone is aware that standing out in this world is like a camel passing through the eye of a needle. One's ability can be clouded by others's ability so in order to stand out , a person must expand their knowledge. For example, When My brother was in high school, he was obliged to learn had must been learned economics. He hated this subject, but now he is always satisfies satisfied with this education course. He want to enter the 블라블라 (실제 시험에서는 물론 이렇게 적으시면 안됩니다) company, but there was no suitable place for my brother to enter my brother. But , fortunately , there was only one seat in economic department. My brother knew that basic knowledge of economic , so he applied to department of economic. So he eventually achieved his dream . He always says that learning economic in the high school is beneficial for students. On top of that, Teaching economics for high school students can give students many opportunities to select their jobs. To explain, It is crucial for people to have a wide variety of knowledge rather than deep knowledge of one specific field. A person with sufficient knowledge is regarded as ' a person of intelligence intellece' in this world while others who lack knowledge are simply ignorded. For instance , in my case, I was learned about economics and other diverse subjects too. I have variety knowledge, so I have many options to choice choose jobs. There are many division of economics , so if students just only learn about economics, They can have variety options to work. and It is beneficial to them. To sum up, learning economics can offer assistance to students and makes broadens their options to work broaden more. In this regard, I argue that all high school students should learn basic economics.
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