■ DirectionYou have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.■ QuestionSummarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading

In recent years, it is argued that the advertisements are showing off their huge effects by encouraging people to buy the items, even though they are not needed. I think that this is a reasonable opinion, but I only partially agree with this idea, considering the new media environment.

Many experts maintain that advertisements can construct the desire for products so that people tend to buy useless needless (두 단어는 약간의 차이가 있습니다.) ones. In particular, many pop stars who appear in the advertisements play an important role in making people have the goods. For example, the majority of Korean young people have brought brand new ear-phones that a singer, Suzi, advertised in a TV commercial, although they already have had the old ones. This indicates that people sometimes buy some goods to be similar to whom they like, although they are not really in need of them.

However, I believe that this phenomenon would disappear in the future because of the new media environment that could allow them (문단에 처음 등장하는 대상을 대명사로 서술해서는 안 됩니다.) to rethink what they really want to get. These days, the internet provides people with many ways to gain information regarding some goods, while they could have it by accepting one-way oriented mass media such as TV or radio in the past. Accordingly, as consumers can actively access and compare many items by searching for them in the Internet (인터넷은 고유명사이므로 대문자 시작입니다. 다른데에도 다 수정해주세요~) internet, they are more likely to take a long time to deeply think which goods are really useful for their lives.

In conclusion, although a lot of consumers have decided to purchase some items because of the power of the advertisements, not rather than their own needs, I think that they would be less affected by them commercials in the near future. This is because the internet would give people opportunities to rethink what they really want to have.

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문단 하나하나를 놓고 보면 전반적으로 잘 적어주셨는데, 논제 및 글 전체의 흐름을 고려했을 때에는 약간의 수정이 필요합니다. 먼저 논제를 보실 때, today 라는 단어에 주목해주셔야 해요. 이 단어로 인해, 글은 무조건 현재가 초점이 되어야 합니다. 미래에 어떻게 될 것인지는 딱히 중요하게 다룰 필요가 없게 되는 것이죠. 그러므로 본론 두 번째 문단은 미래에 그럴 것이다~라고 적는 것보다는, 그냥 '현재 인터넷의 발달로 인해 소비자들도 충분히 합리적인 사고와 선택을 한 뒤에 제품을 구입하는 경우가 많다~' 라고 적어주시는 게 맞습니다. 수고하셨습니다 :)