■ DirectionYou have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.■ QuestionSummarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading

As the The map in (참고로 in 대신 of 도 가능합니다. of 가 약간 더 자연스러운 면도 있고요.) 1995 shows that the part of east side was farmland and forest park (위치 표현에 있어서 최대한 정확해야합니다. 그냥 east 라고 하는 것보다 north-east 가 훨씬 상세하죠.), but in the present map, it is notable that the farmland and forest park developed by a big golf field and two tennis courts have been developed in the area. Another development of housing areas in west side is expended, also added a small road to convenient. Furthermore, the housing and the road in the north-west side have been expanded. (기존 문장에서 정확히 어떤 문맥을 의도하셨는지 100% 이해하지는 못했지만, 아마 이렇게 수정하는 게 맞을 겁니다. 혹시 다른 문맥을 의도하신 거면 댓글 주세요~)

It is also noteworthy that there was a fish market in the south area in 1995, but in the present, apartments for citizens can be seen instead but this is changed by apartments to citizens. Moreover, the fishing port is removed. Across the fish market were many shops, of which were replaced by an area of restaurants Opposite of fish market was many shops and these shops are replaced bya lot of restaurants. In addition, the hotel still exists only added a car park. Meanwhile, the hotel and the cafe remain unchanged, but a car park has newly been built next to the former.

Overall, as maps can be seen that there is a big development,many entertainment facilities added like the golf field and tennis courts in the present and many housing areas offered to people to live. (이 역할을 하는 문단은 서론 뒤로 넣어주세요.)

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어색한 표현이 상당히 많이 보여서 이쪽에 대한 수정이 급선무일 것 같습니다. Task 2 쪽은 그래도 상대적으로 문장이 깔끔한 편인데, 아무래도 Task 1의 경우는 익숙하지 않은 유형이다보니 문장들이 흐트러지는 경우가 자주 드러나네요. 라이팅 공부와 더불어 문법 쪽 보강도 꾸준히 해주셔야 하고, 특히 지도 유형은 모범답안도 많이 참고해보시면서 자주 쓰이는 표현을 익혀두셔야 합니다. 

내용상의 경우도 위치 표현에 있어서 주의해주시고, 최대한 모든 사항을 다룰 수 있도록 신경써주세요. 수고하셨습니다 :)