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문제: 일부는 대학교에 진학하지 않은 학생들이 진학한 학생들에 비해 이후의 교육 면에서 부족함을 겪게 된다고 말한다. 이에 대해 동의하는가, 부정하는가?

Some people think that students who don’t take a break in studies between the high school and the university are at disadvantage compared to students who travel and work after high school before further continuing their education. Do you agree or disagree?

답안

Nowadays, in our competitive world, to succeed, knowledge from school and university is not enough. Therefore, students who study from the school to university get fewer benefits and contribute less too, compared to those student who travel or work and get experience and skills before going high. There are two following reasons to support for my opinion. I refer to the group of people who study from school to university as ‘group A’ and the other group – as ‘group B’.

요즈음, 경쟁 사회에서 성공을 위해선 대학에서 얻는 정보는 충분하지 않다는 내용. 따라서 대학에 진학한 이들이 얻는 이득이 덜하다는 내용이며, 이후 비교를 위해 각 그룹을 a,b 로 나누어 설명하겠나는 제시.

Firstly, at school and university, what group A gains is almost entirely theory, theory and theory. Of course, theory is very neccessary, however, you can’t do everything with just theory. You must have praticeable experience. This is what group A lack very much. Although in the third or fourth year at university, group A can be apprentices in some companies, to help them approach their future jobs, they aren’t trained well because of the short time spent working. And the real job is still very strange to them. After graduating, without experience, group A students can’t accomplish their work perfectly. On the other hand, it takes them time and money to keep up with other experienced students and they may be scorned. Therefore, group A students can contribute less than group B who have the two most important things: skills and experience.

첫번째 근거: group a(대학교 진학)의 학생들은 계속 이론만 배우게 되어 기술과 경험이 부족해, 실제 취업에 있어 부족함을 느끼게 된다는 내용.

Secondly, as group A students are contributing less, they surely get less benefit. Moreover, many companies which employ people in group A have to train them from ground-up. These companies take this cost from group A’s salary to reduce the risk of their employees leaving to other companies after being trained. So, less benefits are unavoidable and certain, Whereas group B members are more loyal and effective workers. They also have useful experience and skills. Besides, their education is the same as or even higher than that of group A. As the result, group B gets more benefits absolutely.

두번째 근거: 대학교 진학 그룹의 학생들은 그렇지 않은 학생보다 일을 덜하고 그만큼 보상도 덜해진다는 내용으로, 회사 입장에서는 이들을 교육해야 하며, 이직할 위험성이 있어 비용이 들기 때문이라는 내용. 반대 그룹은 이미 경험과 기술이 있고 a 그룹보다 더 수준급의 직업 교육을 받아, 그룹 b가 더 쉽게 득을 볼 수 있다는 의미.

In conclusion, I think a student should travel or work before going to the university. That way, not only will they have basic knowledge but also skills and experience which are useful for them to get a good job and have a brilliant future.

결론: 학생들이 대학 입학 전 여행, 일과 같은 경험이 중요하며, 이때 일반적인 지식을 얻는 게 아니라 기술과 경험을 바탕으로 진로와 빛나는 미래를 만들어 갈 수 있다는 내용

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