subject: why do many students drop out of school before they have completed thier education. ?
In todays Korean society, In the Korea, there are plenty of students that fail to complete their study studies is plural . this phenomenon can cause serious problems for the indivduals, and their families, and schools. no need to mention schools
Firstly There are some certain reasons why students drop out school. (Note: break down each point into one paragraph so one a new paragraph for each factor or reason!)
for children's education. - hard in what way- financially and mentally ? elaborate your reasoning.....
Likelihoo d the children will better achievement they can make it. or you can say, the more time parents spend with children the likelihood the children acheiving well at school is slighlty higher. or the chances of the children doing well at school is high.
(a paragraph should at least be 5-6 sentences long)
another aspects or the second factor is.... is that if parents are uneducated, they would not be albe to help thier children in terms of assist thier academic curiousity, encourage them
to finish their study. Several students think that school is just boiling and stifling. unless they are interested in any subjects, it is hard to make them stay in
school.
The problem of school drop out can be reduced by using some strategies. First, educational authorities should co-operate well with parents in order to monitor
children's attendance. a second approach is to implment changes in the curriculum. School try to create some subjects which can be interesting for students.
Third, thirdly, government can help for poor students by giving them a no intest loan (give them a no interest or low interest loan. . Poverty is no sin. (what does this mean ??)
As can be seen As a result , there is no one soluation of school drop outs. (isnt this contradicting to your essay? what do u mean? or do want to there is not only one solution to solve this problem, but there are many (so list the key solutions here)
Not only parents should look after thier children, but school and educational authorties need to
work closely together to reduce this phenomenon. (need to explain and elaborate this could be broken down into a few paragraphs)
This should be fine for a draft essay plan, but when you write the actual essay remember to follow the format i outlined for you