채점 | Fluency and Coherence | Pronunciation | Lexical Resource | Grammatical Range and Accuracy | Total |
Score | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 |
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Comment | You should say:
Well, about two years ago, during the opening party of our college, I had the pleasure of meeting a remarkable person whom I fondly refer to as Grandma 현정. Currently studying fine arts, I was immediately drawn to her when she mentioned her lifelong dream of becoming a painter since her childhood. I have known Grandma 현정 for two years since our initial meeting at the college's opening party. Throughout our continued encounters, we continued to share our passion for art and painting. Additionally, 현정 shared her experiences as a dedicated volunteer during her younger year She revealed that she had actively participated in volunteer work, offering assistance to those in need and making a positive impact on their lives. I was touched by her story. I'm in the same department as her, but I haven't taken the same class yet. If I have a chance, I want to have time to take classes and study with her. I Firstly, her unwavering dedication to her dream and her ability to overcome challenges inspire me to pursue my own artistic aspirations. Secondly, her selflessness as a volunteer demonstrates her empathy and compassion, qualities that I greatly admire and would like to cultivate in my own art work. Lastly, her talent in translating experiences into art showcases her creativity and ability to convey powerful messages through her work. In conclusion, I am happy to meet her and share each other's passion, and I look forward to studying together and having an impact on each other in the future. |
주어진 질문의 요구사항을 정확히 이해하고 이에 부합하는 좋은 답안 작성해주셨습니다. 글쓴이가 묘사하는 인물이 누구인지 그리고 어떤 특징 및 인격을 가지고 있고 글쓴이가 어떻게 해당 인물과 유대감을 형성하게 되었는지 한 눈에 이해하고 납득할 수 있도록 설명해주신 점이 인상적입니다. 수고하셨습니다.