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Fossil fuels have been one of the most important economic resources nationwide, >> because 앞뒤론 콤마 없습니다 because it is very efficient that developing to develop the world industries. This essay will I argue that although coal and oil are effective source, it arises to rise several issues. >> 계속 좋다고 하다가 갑자기 마지막에 여러 문제들을 일으킨다고 하는건 절대 좋은게 아닙니다
First of all, fossil fuels such as oil and coal contribute to global warming. That is because it is not both green energy and decayed >> 병렬의 형태로 같은 품사가 나와야 합니다. When it comes to using If fossil is burned, CO2 will be released to the atmosphere. CO2 makes the global environment to make worse, >> 콤마 빼주세요 because the increase of CO2 brings climate changes to the world. For example, the more coal uses the more nationwide temperatures high >> the 비교급 형태는 쓰지 않는게 좋습니다 문법 파괴적인 문장이니다. It affects negatively human health getting worse such as cancer, >> 콤마 빼주세요 because CO2 makes ozone-layer's depletion which brings human to cancer. >> 얘기 반복이네요
The expensive cost is important that fossil fuels are limited by oil-rich countries such as Saudi Arabia. They have control of power oil prices. Most countries cannot help using to oil, however >> 부사라 접속사처럼 두 절을 이어주지 못합니다 문장을 끊어서 However 를 쓰던가 oil 뒤에 세미콜론 ; 을 붙여주세요 , the amount of oil are reserved the middle east country. >> 글이 서로 따로 노네요
On this basis, it can be concluded that the government should make appropriate tax regulation.
서론 본론 결론 그 안에서도 한 문장 한 문장이 따로 놉니다 결론은 갑자기 tax가 왜 나오는지도 모르겠습니다 글자수도 250자에 한참 모자르구요 아직 글을 쓸 때가 아닌 듯 싶습니다 문법, 어휘 모두가 너무 약합니다 논리도 약하구요 Task2 보단 Task1을 먼저 쓰셔야 하지만 우선은 Task1보다도 문법 공부가 절실하겠습니다 한글로 쓰고 영어로 옮겨써서 논리 구성해보시길 바랍니다
Task Achievement - 3 Coherence and Cohesion - 3 Lexical Resource - 5 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 4
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