Your Answer ▼ There is an pressing argument that the most valuable goal for the a country is to enforce their economic progress, while others claim a counterargument that the other progresses should be treated equally important as the economic progress. Developing economy is a common virtue of industrial countries. When the economy has developed with active circulation of money within a country, the country would be able it would be possible for(이런 식으로 생략을 이용한 paraphrasing 을 이용하면 country 가 연속해서 쓰이는 것을 방지할 수 있겠죠.) to offer better well fare for the nation, therefore the public would benefit. For example, Korea's inauguration of improving economy was in 1970, and it had lead to a significant innovation in the nation's lives with diametric buildings and various of social infrastructures that provide improvement in social quality. Economy can be said as the important part of a country that has a significant role. However, it can provoke a serious problem on earth when only regarding a economy as the a most important factor beyond other progresses. Every year, the standard temperature of the Earth increases consistently due to global warming, which is caused by reckless destruction of environment to develop economy. There is a need for eco-friendly systems to prevent crisis of environment. In fact, according to a recent study that was projected in Korea, about 80% of the nations are falling behind in efforts to conserve the planet's nature. It shows that progress to preserve environment is necessary as well as development in economy. All in all, I certainly agree with the content that the economy is the important goal of a country as it is a good for every nations. On the other hand, I also claim that there is a serious problem that has to be confronted (마찬가지로, 이러한 paraphrasing 을 통해 일인칭 we 의 사용을 피할 수 있습니다.) we have to confront as a consequence of developing economy without any consideration for nature, and we not only have to aware it but also give an effort to insolate (insulate?) Earth.
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