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The provided chart illustrates that the total population growth in India and China from 2000 to 2050. Also, this line graph shows how population grew since 2000 and how population will be changed to 2050. (이 문장과 앞 문장의 의미가 상당히 겹칩니다. 제가 바로 이전 글에 바꿔드린 것처럼 여기도 조금 수정해주세요.)
It is clear that India experiences upward trend, however, China shows a slight increase and significant decrease over the period. (새로운 문단이 시작되므로, 무엇에 대한 증감인지 다시 한번 상기시켜주세요. 여기의 경우 인구가 되겠죠.)
China had more population than India in 2000,. To be specific, the number of Chinese was around 1.25 billion while Indian was there were 1 billion Indians. Until 2030, there will be a gradual increase in China from 1.25 billion to 1.45 billion. Over the same period, Indian will see with a dramatic increase to 1.45 billion.
Moving onto the year 2030, the number of Indian and Chinese will reach up to approximately 1.45 billion respectively. (2030년의 수치가 두 문단 사이에 겹쳐서 나오므로 중복되지 않게 수정해주세요~) The population of China will see gently a gentle decline declined and reach almost 1.4 billion in the end of the period., whereas Whereas, the population of India will experience a rapid surge to 1.6 billion throughout the same period. |