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This table compares information about figures for purchasing fast food, divided in three distinct three categories (Hell Pizza, Burger Fuel, and Smart Sushi) over a period of a week from Monday to Sunday.
To begin with, it can be clearly seen that the amount of sales of junk food is the most highest one during for three days,>> 콤마 빼주세요 from Thursday to Saturday. >> 오버뷰는 이 문장 하나네요On Friday, the most popular shop is the Burger Fuel which sells food as much as its products about 400 thousand dollars, reaching a peak, whereas a the pizza shop restaurant and a the sushi shops >> house sell as around 240 and 300 respectively. >> 같은 디테일 본문 단락인데 왜 문단 나눠주셨나요? Between Monday and Wednesday, people do not frequently use visit the fast food shops restaurants about half as much as the latter three days >> ??. The average consumption of pizza restaurant's is nearly 65 >> 65가 뭔가요? , >> 접속사가 없는데 어떻게 이어졌나요? those of burger's and sushi's are about 75 and 175>> 75 and 175가 뭔가요? ,>> 콤마 빼주세요 respectively. Relatively, it is in the weekend, especially on Sunday, to use for the least number of customers in common in three fast food shops decreases >> 뒤에 콤마 빼주세요, despite the amount of sale of is 270 thousand dollars in the Burger Fuel. It is because the Hell pizza and the smart Sushi have 45 thousand dollars each for sale of food. >> 원래 기준이 어느 정도인지를 알아야 낮고 높은걸 비교가 되겠습니다
In conclusion, it is noticeable that there is a are different trends, depending on each day and daily figures for restaurants vary considerably >>어디 걸리는 동산가요?.
매번 적을 때 마다 나아지고 있다는 생각이 안드네요...ㅠㅜ
왜 이렇게 어려운거죠.ㅠㅜㅜㅜ 아....
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현재 나아지고 있지 않은 이유는 간단합니다 문법 단어가 너무 약합니다 그러니 계속 같은 범위 내에서만 돌고 돌게 됩니다 단어도 문장 구조들도 모두 제한적인 형태로만 반복이 되고 있고 use the fast food shop 같이 너무 간단한 것들도 틀립니다 fast food 를 사용할 순 없죠 Task1 보다도 단어 문법 공부를 하시다가 쓰시는게 길게 봤을 때도 훨씬 실력이 빨리 늘 것 같습니다 또한 pizza shop sushi shop 이 표현들은 모두 틀렸습니다 restaurant, pizzeria, ~ house, ~store 등이 맞습니다
Task Achievement - 5 Coherence and Cohesion - 5 Lexical Resource - 4 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 5 5.0 예상합니다 |