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The two maps show what happened in the village of Stokeford, over the eighty-year period a eighty-years period between 1930 and 2010. Overall, iIt can be clearly seen in 1930, Stokeford had washas a few houses and was covered with lots of farmlands, gardens and a large house, but 2010 it has become much more residential residental as well as with considerably new houses and retirement retirment home. Looking at in detail detial, two areas which have been improve improvement were south-west and north-east of the village. These areas used to be full of farmlands, but now the farmlands have been removed and were replaced by a host of new houses. After all shops knocked down, new roads had been constructed to link likn new houses near the bridge and post office at around new houses. Another change was the replacement of retirement home surrounding with new houses in the place of gardens and large home. The primary school was modified 건물에 modify라는 표현은 잘 쓰지 않는 것 같아요. 표 내용을 보고 어떤 내용인지 확인해서 적절한 단어로 수정해주세요 in 2010 with 2 more buildings while river stoke was on the same place in both the time period.
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