▶ Your Answer : This bar graph provides information about the figures for variation of cost of various costs of house divided into five distinct areas (namely, New York, Madrid, Tokyo, Frankfurt, and London) from 1990 to 2002 compared with those of 1989. First of all, the majority of averages the housing price between 1990 and 1995 showed minus downward changes, while that of it 1996 to 2002 increased in 1996 to 2002, surpassing the figures of 1989. Over the formal five years>> from when to when ?, the numbers of Madrid and Japan>> 일본과 마드리드의 수? 또한 일본이 아니라 도쿄입니다 accounted for about 2% similarly each, whereas relatively there were dramatic drops in the figures for the rest of cities at around more than 5%. The two former cities, Tokyo and London, indicated the same decrease about 7% falling down. On the other hand, throughout the period shown, the most alternation >>?? on price was undoubtedly showed in London figures. For the next five years, London's averages of price for house significantly jumped significantly to more than 11%. As the same way, most cities could be seen the increased figures, respectively 5%, 4%, and -5% in New York, Madrid, and Tokyo respectively, but Frankfurt's cost decreased a few nearly 1%. In conclusion, by comparing of 1989's prices, it can be notable that the averages of house cost was steadily ascending and was predicted to continue in each country in different patterns.
이번에도 무슨 말인지 알 수 없는 것들이 쓰였습니다 이 정도라면 Task1 말고 문법과 단어부터 확실히 잡아주셔야 할 듯 싶습니다 전부터 첨삭해드리는데 고쳐지는 면이 보이지 않고 오기를 부리는 것 같단 느낌이 듭니다 전에 코멘트 해드렸던 부분에서 계속 고쳐지지 않고 발전하는 모습이 보이지 않으면 제가 첨삭해드리는 이유도 없습니다 어쩌다가 6점대가 나온다면 그게 본인의 평소 실력인 것처럼 생각할 수 있는 위험도 있으니 단어 문법 최대한 잡아서 문장을 정확하게 구사하는 법을 공부하셔야 할 듯 싶습니다
Task Achievement - 6 Coherence and Cohesion - 4 Lexical Resource - 5 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 5 5.0 예상합니다 |