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■ You should spend about 40 minutes on this task ■ Present a written argument or case to an educated reader no special knowledge of?the?following topic ■ You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant ???evidence ■ You should write at least 250 words | |
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Topic : The use of computuers in today's society is becoming more
widespread. Assess the effects of the rapid development of computer
technology on computer illiteracy. Will this make computer illiterates
more disadvantaged in the future? | |
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Nowadays, the usage of computers has enlarged its range of influence
at an unexpected pace in our society. As a result, It is not too much to say
that almost everyone is learning how to use computers even at the a very young age. However, what Then, how about those who doesn't have knowledge about computers? Following paragraphs will identify some effects that these people have get.
(주제문 하나 들어간다음에 예시를 사용해야 할 것 같네요. 뒷문장이 더 일반적이므로 앞뒤문장을 바꿀수도 있겠다는 생각이 듭니다.) For example, in my country, people who are computer illiterates are often teased and neglected by others. Not knowing how to use computer is regarded as not knowing how to speak one's mother tongue. As these, popularization of computer technics can be actually realized.(요거 문장의 뜻이 이해가 잘 안갑니다.) Living in a computerized society bring surely bad treatments and especially inconveniences to those who are computer illiterates.
First of all, submitting or handling documents and or bills are treated with by computers. Banking directly at banks is now replaced by transfered to internet banking system. Public programs are now uploaded or downloaded through interent. Person who is are not familiar with those might face severe hardships doing his or /her daily activities.
Secondly, communication with others and shareing information about
recent news are held online. Getting valuable information as fast as possible
is the most important qualification to find jobs easily. People who find it hard
to have access close admission online will lag behind in the intense competitons, today.
In conclusion, I believe that computer illiterates would be more disadvantaged and loose many opportunities or benenfits in the near future.
They soon will not be able to understand their friends talking about computer
related conversation. That's why they won't hang out around with others
in the society anymore. They will just stay home alone. To prevent this
serious situation, teaching computer illiterates should be focused as soon as
possible.(주제와 관련이 없는 문장 같습니다.) | |
문장이 이전 글보다 확실하다는 생각이 듭니다.
약간 한글이 그대로 번역된 것 같은 영어 문장이 느껴지고요.
일단 문제에서 답하라는 것은 두가지
1. 컴퓨터 발전이 컴맹에게 끼치는 영향
2. 이로 인해 가까운 미래에 문맹이 불리할 것인가.
1번과 2번이 오묘하게 섞여있네요. 그럴수밖에 없을 것 같고.
글의 논리에 대해서는 제가 평할수 없을것 같아요 ㅠㅠ 저도 어떻게 써야 할지 감이 잘 안잡히는군요.
죄송합니다.