writing task 2
문제:
Write about the following topic:
"The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing."
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
제가 쓴 글입니다:
I disagree with the argument which explains "The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing".
For first reason for my argument, in all shops in towns and cities, we can check whether the clothes fit into us. But by online shopping, we cannot check what kinds of fiber it was made of. So, we cannot check the specific textures of the clothing and the size. Someone can say that we can check the size and fitting by another buyer's reviews by online shopping. But everybody has different body shapes. So we can not check the best clothing that fits into us perfectly only using the information like weight or height. So, people will use the offline shops to go shopping. And there, they can touch and feel the textures and try the clothes on their body to check the specific look. Although online shopping may show a growth the growth of online shopping, all shops in towns and cities will remain their places.
For the second reason, offline shopping became one of the biggest cultures for customers. As people enjoy the weekends in modern society, people go see a movie or go shopping to hang out with their friends or their families. Moreover, they take a trip to another region or even overseas different country. From this cultural growth that people enjoy their leisure more than any other days, offline shopping will not disappear because of the growth of online shopping. People really enjoys to go shopping and spend the good time with their cherishable people.
According to these two reasons, I disagree for the argument that explains " The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
(6/5/5/6) 5.5
지금 치르셔도, 이정도 글을 시간 내에 쓰실 수 있다는 가정하에 5.0은 무조건 넘기시고 5.5도 충분히 받으실 수 있을 겁니다. 문장을 and but so 로 시작하지 마시고, 다양한 표현들을 익히는데에 집중해주시면 좋고, 서론 결론은 다른 분들이 한번 쓰시는 것을 보면 대략 어떻게 작성해야 하는지 감이 잡히실 겁니다. 템플릿을 참고해보시는 것도 도움이 될 거고요. 수고하셨습니다 :)