Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have the little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
It is worth discussing about the best way to improve public health. Some people say that public health can be increased by number of sports facilities, while some people does not say so. In my opinion, by increasing number of sports facilities, the chances of making public healthy will be increased.
Increasing the number of sports facilities can enhance public health, since as sports facilities increase, people tend to use them more often in terms of their actual number. When sports center is nearby to someone’s house, it is more likely for that person to use that facility, and hence it will lead itself to become healthy. In contrast, when sports facilities are not located to someone’s neighborhood, that person might not even aware of the sports center, or feel the needs to work out, in which it is most likely not to become healthy.
However, it might also be true that having a lot of sports facilities nearby someone’s place does not always make that person healthy. Since it is not quite sure whether this person would visit gym or not, just because there are sports center in their neighborhood. There must be some ways to encourage people to work out in gym, without locating plenty of sports center in the city.
As in my opinion, the best way for improving people’s health is to build lots of sports facilities around the city. Making variety of sports facilities will earn publicity, making people aware of its existence. When public is aware, they start using them, and when they do, they begin to change. Which has much higher chances for public to use facilities, which will make them become healthier. Hence I think the governments should expand their business on building sports facilities for sake of public health.
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