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The line chart illustrates the amount of fish and three distinct meat such as chicken, beef, and lamb consumed by a certain country in Europe over the period of 25 years starting from 1979 to 2004. At first glance, it is clear that the expenditures of chicken and beef had the most dramatic changes. First of all, beef was the most popular sort of meat in 1979 with over 200g, while just under 150g of chicken was used eaten. However, despite of sharp growths by 1984, there was a rapid drop in beef consumption for the following two decades. Simultaneously, the preference of chicken increased gradually and reached to about 250g in 2004, which was more than twice as much as the amount of beef. On the other hand, the use of lamb decreased steadily from over 150g in 1979 to around 50g in 2004, >> 콤마 넣어주세요 whereas fish was the least popular one throughout the period with approximately 50g. Overall, although there were differences in different kinds of meat the residents prefered, they had used had the more meat than fish over the period.
ㅠㅠ task 2는 좀 더 공부해서 도전해보겠습니다 ㅠ ---------------- 아주 늘었다고 생각이 되는 글이네요 효과적으로 잘 구성하셨습니다 Task1은 이제 그만 쓰시고 Task2에 집중해보시는 것도 좋겠습니다 좀 더 단어를 고급스러운 단어, 문장 구성을 좀 더 다양하게 하면 더욱 높은 점수가 예상됩니다
Task Achievement - 7 Coherence and Cohesion - 7 Lexical Resource - 6 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 6 6.5 예상합니다 |