▶ Your Answer : Apparently, in the past, people who
wished to complete a higher education degree, certainly studied university in their country. where they lived. However, Hovewer, in todays, today, they have big chances to study aboard in
all over the world universities. It is believed that going to study outside of one's own home country, often have has great benefits for students.
First and foremost, nNowadays, many foreigh universities have make an offer for the overseas students to study any
degree they wish. That is to say, they have enormous opportunities to get
potential experiences than in the past. To specify, students can easily improve impove
their language skills and life experience. For example,. a person who has just
finished English course cource and prefer to study aboard, might find out more language
skills by communicating with native speakers by studying in countries using English. To be more precise, they can
achieve success successed in speaking better perefctly as soon as possible.
Secondly, it is said that studying abroad aboard may give have unique opportunities for students. What is more, they learn new
culture, get lots of friends from all over the world and gain vital knowledge knowlegde
and experience. A good example would be here that, students who wish to attain
the highest job career, can obtain significant satisfied skills and knowledge knowlegde to being be taught by highly competent higher qualitative teachers. Additionally, uUniversity life leads to
improvements of students in to participating in environmental activities activies and to do more
research. As a consequence, they improve their knowledge and can easily get achive
the a job with high paid they would like.
Last, but not least, On the other hand, there is no
doubt that studying in a foreign foreigh country may have some drawbacks. Particularly,
students who are from developing countries can not be eligible for some funds given by
universities., Therefore, they do have not have enough money to pay living expenses. expence. That
is to say, some students who went study aboard, get a part-time job for pocket
money and living costs. As time goes by on, they spend much more time on making
money than doing homework. Following this, they would prefer to earn much
income to rather than studying, and then they might stop going to lessons. That is
why, they would fail in exams and even be excluded from the university curriculums. 사례 내용이 너무 극단적이고 범위 역시 '개발도상국의 어려운 학생들'에 제한되어 있어서 설득력이 부족합니다.
By way of a conclusion, despite the
fact that, there are students who wasted their time, there are students others who have
achieved the potential success. To be more precise, students who come home after completing compeleted foreigh universities degree in other countries, can get a job with higher salary as
well as would create new job career in the future.
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