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The given line graph above illustrates the mutual relation which is involved with changing eating habits of inhabitant in the United States per day during from 1980 to 2010.
As time goes on, American people who takes the RTE food is inclined to increase conspicuously. Whereas >> 접속사이므로 Meanwhile 을 써줍니다, the other American person who eat the Homemade food is liable to decline sharply . Judging from these situations, there is the tendency to be inverse proportion to each other. >> 약간 모호한 듯 싶습니다
Between 1980 and 1990, the portion of people, who make food at >> home 은 at과 다닙니다 home, >> 중간에 수식이 들어가면 앞 뒤를 콤마로 나눠주세요 was higher than who take RTE food, although the Homemade's ratio was dropping gradually. and >> 문장이 너무 길어 끊어드렸습니다 Moreover, at the same period, the Ready To Eat food's portion is climbing moderately. However, >> 콤마 넣어주세요 from about the late 1990s, that circumstance is changed. The location of both chart become converse.>> location이 어떻게 쓰인지 모르겠습니다
Eventually, in the rough middle of 2000s, the ratio of the RTE food reach at the highest level, which is around four-fifths>> four out of tive라고 하셔도 될 듯 싶습니다 four over five도 되겠구요. On the other hand, the portion of the bottom of the Homemade food bottom out at nearly a fifth >> bottom은 어떻게 쓰였나요?. These portions make difference about four times. After those states, the RTE's ratio reduces slightly >> 콤마 빼셔도 됩니다but the homemade's portion grows also unremarkablely. During the survey period of 30 years, the eating custom >> 관습 등의 뜻이 강합니다 the diet 도 괜찮겠네요 in the USA is totally changed.
우선 동사는 모두 과거로 작성이 되어야 합니다 과거의 일을 서술하기 때문이죠 또한 말이 약간 모호한 부분들과 문법적인 실수들이 꽤 있습니다 다시 봐주세요 Task Achievement - 6 Coherence and Cohesion - 5 Lexical Resource - 6 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 5 5.5 예상합니다 |