The given two diagrams >> diagram은 그림으로 된 차트가 나왔을 때 말합니다 represent how many the quantities of property and violent felonys >> 단어는 좋았지만 적절하지 않습니다 were changed covering the years 1982 to 2002 in America.
As an overall trend as를 나란히 두 개를 쓰는 것은 좋지 않습니다 둘 중 하나를 고른다면 뒤에 있는 as 를 쓰는게 좋습니다, as time went by, the amount of property crimes kept dropping, while ones of violent crimes rose slightly despite of several opposite flows each other >> 무슨 말이죠?.
Looking at the chart in detail, according to the first picture, property crimes, it can be clearly analyzed that the trend climbed steadily to over 4,000 population in the initial four years; however, it started to decline constantly and reached plummeted its bottom to below 3,000 population in following eight years. After that, the figure of the property crimes remained stable in 3,000 population despite smooth jump from 2,900 to 4,000 between 1994 and 1998.
On the other hand, in the case of the violent crimes, it is obviously found that the flow grew slowly to 600 population until 1990, including a slight drop to about 580 and 500 in 1986 and 1988. Next, the trend stood at the same rate for >> 구체적인 시간이 나오면 for 입니다 2 years and plunged suddenly toward its bottom ( roughly 300 population). Thereafter, it soared rapidly and arrived at the peak to approximately 620 population in the year of 1998. Subsequently, the number dropped moderately, recording nearly 580 population in 2002.
오버뷰 디테일이 들어가서 좋았습니다 둘의 직접적인 비교가 있었다면 더욱 좋았을 듯 싶네요
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