▶ There is no
doubt that education and the learning process has changed since the
introduction of a new technological device - a computers. There is an ever
increasing use of it such a device especially in the classroom. Due to this, the
teachers' position is questioned if it should remain to exist in order to to be remained in existence to support young
learners. I believe that the role of teachers would change, but teachers itself would not be eliminated not the elimination
of its role.
It is clear
that, the computers and the internet provides an enormous resources at a faster
rate which was not available before. These enable students and professionals
can to get many lot of valuable and necessary information related to any area of study
in a short time, which is impossible without computers. An Advanced learners or
professors also benefit advantaged from computers as they can make a selective
judgement on information to complete a task and can present their work to their
superior at a faster rate - through emails for instance. Not only this, online
classes are widely supported by workers as they can easily grasp further
knowledge, which expands their career path, at their own pace. In this way,
learners can experienced of the greatest technological revolutions in the learning
processes and can adapt knowledge from a computer instead not from a teacher.
However,
teachers' role is different from the computers'. Teachers might be important
for students because teachers are not only teaching for resources, but they also
teaching in regards to human interactions, which can influence society and will
affect pupils' personalities to be more positive as time passes according to time. In some
cases, learners are required to repeat the same concept in order to understand
fully, which could be done by teachers with an appropriate skill-set selected
for them. Teachers' role as a person, who provides a relevant resource, could
disappear and this can be substituted with the computers, but the social
interactions and guidance part cannot be replaced by the machines.
I believe that,
In my perspective, I believe that teachers play and will continue to play a vital role in the
classroom in the future because no machine can replace the human interaction
and its consequences.
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