It is evident that the world is becoming increasingly complex and advanced, which affect all spheres of humans’ lives, including the one of recruitment market. Consequently, a general trend that the practical skills are more important than academic knowledge seems to be more accepted nowadays. Moreover, some people believe that no more academic qualifications will be required for the future job applicants. I agree to a certain extent. <(왜 어느정도만 agree를 하시는 지 그 이유를 주시면 좋을 것 같습니다) In this essay, both sides of this issue will be analysed with some applicable supports.
To begin with, proponents of insisting more practical skills for job seekers would base their grounding on several facts. Firstly, practical experiences are, in any types of job, more worthy and essential skills to perform a job properly and correctly. When companies hire experienced workers, they can be assured that they will provide quality results. Secondly, it is generally expected that a specific period of training to obtain a variety of practical skills is required for a profession such as doctors, lawyers, engineers and so on despite of the fact that they already spent several years to get an academic qualifications. Lastly, more and more employers began to feel that practical abilities are more important than theoretical knowledge and this will affect their views to find a new employee with full experiential skills.
On the other hand, there are others who would contend that academic knowledge still play a vital role to learn a new skill and prevent or overcome an emergency situation. From their point of view, they have created a flowchart of the operation which is related to workers’ safety and should be memorised in every workplace for the employees. Hence, they can avoid any accidents. In addition, basic knowledge is also crucial even for a manual job that requires monotonous tasks in order to improve their skills and to be promoted to better and higher positions.
To recapitulate, taking into account both sets of argument, my belief is that the theories and knowledge still have a great potential to nurture highly intelligent workers in the future.
Score: 6.5
Comment: 내용은 아주 좋다고 생각을 합니다. 다만 글쓴이의 의견을 묻고 있는 질문에 다른 사람의 의견을 discuss해주셨습니다. To what extent do you agree or disagree이기 때문에 글쓴이의 주장과 의견을 서술해주셨어야합니다. 즉 opinion essay 보다는 discussion essay처럼 들립니다. 그 외에 글쓰시는데에는 크게 문제가 없습니다. 수고 하셨습니다.