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It is considered by some people that a scientific-technological advancement has brought a lot of negative effects on the students' way of learning while there are others who think that technology has greatly improved the method we they get more information. In my opinion, I firmly believe that through this development, students can now obtain additional information much quickly and conveniently.
To begin with, it is a fact that with the existence of the internet technology, people could acquire extra references and data more easily than ever before. Many different types of search engines, such as Google and Yahoo, give access to an abundant variety of knowledge on various topics. In the case of university students, these useful websites are surely helpful for them when they are doing their assignments or projects. It is illustrated by a particular one study carried out on undergraduates in which is about 90 percent of them said they got a better mark when they researched their thesis on the Internet.
On top of that, with the development of technology, it is has become available to discuss with other schoolers via numerous online communities regardless of time and place as they can participate anytime that suits them. Furthermore, they are not only able to share their diversity of opinions but also to ask something straightaway when they are being curious or facing any troubles with their schoolwork. In fact, a recent study showed that there are myriad benefits of peer-to-peer learning through online discussions. For example, because of the convenience, teenagers are less distracted and can develop their ideas without getting bored.
In conclusion, although certain people think that technological advances have drawbacks in some aspects, it is evident that these advances made it simpler and faster to research information.
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body 1 밑줄친 연구 부분 예시 수정했습니다. 이렇게 쓰면 좀 더 나을까요? 매번 감사드립니다:)
According to a particular study carried out on undergraduates, most of them said they got (어차피 내용 자체가 조금 수정이 되어야 해서 문장이 전반적으로 바꿔야되지만, lee minmin 님 정도의 영어 실력이면 현재 got 보다는 더 좋은 표현을 충분히 찾아주실 수 있을 겁니다.) a better mark when they researched their thesis on the Internet. Therefore, There there is no doubt about why 97 percent of university students always get necessary information online in order to receive a favorable evaluation. (총평에서 예시, 연구 등을 어떤 식으로 전개해야되는지에 대해 설명드리겠습니다.)
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