▶ Your Answer :
The given line chart illustrates changes in the number
of people changed between birth and death in Scotland over the period 80 years
between 1940 and 2020.
Iin brief, what stands out from the graph is
that there is are considerably a considerable downward tendency in birth rate and population growth rate,
while the death rate shows saw a slightly upward trend over a period. 사망률은 2000년대 후반쯤에 상승세를 그리기 때문에 전반적으로 상승세를 보인다는 식의 묘사는 부적절합니다.
Iin more detail, there is were a similar trend
between birth and population. The proportion of birth was significantly far
higher than the other sections with 2.5 percent in 1940, but it plunged rapidly
to around 1 percent in 1960. Aafter that year, it decreased gradually to
approximately 0.5 percent until 2020. 2020은 '전망'에 해당하니 전망과 관련된 표현을 써 주는 것도 좋을 것 같아요. In this reason, the population growth
percentage began with 0.8 percent in 1940 and then it had a fluctuate until 1970.1960.
In the following years, it diminished continually and picked the lowest figure
with 0 percent in 2005.
On the other hand, the number of death rate was set
off with 1.5 percent in 1940, then it declined halved down to just 0.5 percent by the end of the 1950s. Since then, in the
sequences year, it leveled off to 2010 and it relatively increased with over
1.7 percent in 2020. 이 부분도 전망에 해당한다고 볼 수 있을 것 같아요.
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