While travelling, some people prefer to visit lots of places within a short time.
Others prefer to spend longer periods in one or two places.
Why do people’s preferences differ in this way?
What are the advantages and disadvatages of each approach?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant exmaples from your own knowledge or experience.
There are two types of people when it comes to person about travelling. some Some people prefer to visit a variety of places within a short period. Others others prefer to spend longer periods in one or two places.
The main reason to differ from people’s preferences in this way explains two views separately. (여기는 어떤 의미로 적어주셨나요? 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.) Firstly, there are a lot of different historical and cultural sightseeing which people prefer within a short time period. For example, it makes travellers helps travellers gain more broad experience and provide various meetings from different type of locals. On the other hand, people who prefer to spend longer periods in one place are likely to relax and enjoy the atmosphere in one or two places. In short, they could leisurely enjoy time and relax more fully during the long time period.
Secondly, there There are advantages and disadvantages regarding two ways of travellers. To begin with, short time travellers can have a broader experience to visit various places. Meanwhile, long time travellers can have in depth experience to visit a few places. However, On top of that, short time travellers have to spend high transportation and admission fees. This type of travelers may waste of time and money. On the other hand, it is too difficult for long time travellers to experience a variety cuisines or cultural sightseeing.
In conclusion, short period travelling seems have more advantage than long time travelling. I firmly believe that in terms of travel expenses and depth experience, long time travellers fully outweighs short time travellers.
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