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It
is often argued that it is a pretty (이러한 문맥 아래 쓰이는 pretty 는 구어의 성격이 강해서, 가급적이면 사용하지 않는 게 좋습니다.) fair way to pay the amount of the payment
as a pension for the people who are over 60 years. Even if it doesn’t does not (줄임말 사용을 지양해주세요~) appeal to
the very poor and order generation, I completely disagree with its this opinion and
think that the pension for the elderly citizen shall be paid by the government
bodies in accordance with an income level each person. (여기는 어떤 의미로 적어주셨나요? 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다. 파란 부분은 다 댓글 주시면 돼요.)
First
of all, I believe that it is an obvious reason to make a significant gap
between rich and poor is getter bigger. It might become one of the social
issues if the government bodies continue to operate the current pension payment
system. For example, there are a number of people who receive is a number of the person who gets a pension on a
regular basis because of the local authority's policy even though they are an upper class and have pretty much money as
well because of the local authority’s policy.
(이 밑은 다 하나의 문단입니다. 엔터 두 번이나 더 칠 필요 없어요. 이것도 점수에 들어가는 사항이므로 주의해주세요!)
Secondly,
making a payment of the same pension to every single elderly person has a
substantially negative impact on the older citizens who are really poor and
indeed need to get a large amount of pension periodically. In
particular, poor people will mainly use the pension money as a living
expense because they might have financial difficulty difficulties to survive and
insufficient money for living that leads to survival crisis and competition in
society. For
instance, in Korea, there are approximately 3-million elderly citizens (숫자를 지어내는 건 상관이 없는데, 어느정도 현실적인 수준으로 지어내주셔야 합니다. 지금과 같이 과해도 너무 과한 정도로 가지 않도록 주의해주세요~) who are
living alone with economical difficulty we still have although our governments
have tried to announce plenty of the policies that would be helpful for the person who really needs assistance.
In
conclusion, I strongly believe that the pension should be paid to certain
people according to their income level because it is the more fair method to
improve balanced social development and support them with their great welfare. |