Some people think that companies and individuals, rather than the government, should pay for cleaning up pollution. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevance examples from your own knowledge of experience.
Currently, the earth Earth is tired of several kinds of pollution. Thus, many companies and countries are seeking solutions to prevent from the world becoming worse. There are many perspectives regarding who should take responsibility that who are going to pay for it. In my opinion, the government should pay more than other organizations or individuals.
First of all, companies are running for profit. Many companies and individuals’ goals are making money and this target is not connected to paying for cleaning up pollution. However, there is an exception. For example, the government can regulate companies and impose fines if the organizations make pollution such as chemicals or air pollution. Profitable organizations do not have any obligation to use their money for pollution.
Besides, governments have to make a better environment. Governments in most countries are consisted through votes made by citizens Most countries are consisting of their government through voting. Thus, politicians who are selected by citizens should work to improve the quality of countries, people and society. For example, in my country, Korea, one of the politician’s promise was making an eco-city and improving the quality of air. Even though it costs lots of money to support the pledge such as repairing the water tank if they need cleaning, he tried his best and many people started to support him. Also, due to related to other countries, these changes can cause making a better environment all around the world. (여기는 어떤 의미로 적어주셨나요? 댓글 주시거나 다음 글에 알려주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.)
Therefore, governments should pay more money to clean the countries. It is not necessary to spend money on companies, but if they (문단에 처음 등장하는 대상이 대명사로 작성되어서는 안 됩니다.) support the government, such as promoting eco-life, we can make a more beautiful, livable world.
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